Narrative writing

Monday 27 September 2021

WALT: Add descriptive features to my Narrative

Once there was a time traveler who’s name was Jockey. He was a nice time traveler about three meters high and he was fearless. Jockey had a pet cheetah called Nico. Nico was a mustache cheetah he would sneak off at night to go hunting with a Kitten who jockey found out that a kitten was sneaking in through their house window at night. When Jockey looked at his eyes when he was just about to put him outside he saw the look of worry in his eyes so Jockey named Him Edmon. Edmon was brown with white fire like pocodotes and was fearless but he was a little mean. Edmon and Nico got along like a cat and dog but when jockey looked around he saw something weird going on in the garage so he followed Edmon and he saw that Edmon was a secret animal spy and Jockey joined the secret spy organization. So they went on there first to the tropical area called Samson. Their organization has reason to believe there is an enemy hideout there. So Jockey, Edmon and Nico go undercover as spy’s for Samson hideout.

Hiding not syncing

Edmon, Jockey and Nico land at the location they searched for hours but had no luck, so they decide to camp and stay the night. When they fell asleep someone from the Samson cleaning found them but Jockey has on super power if anyone touches him or hormones him time travel. So that before that happens he can wake his past self up, so they don’t get harmed or hurt, so they time traveled, and they were unharmed, but they were still in danger. So they started to run to their boat but when they got there they ran into something strange. They ran into the secret hideout. Edmon put Jokey and Nico in a bush and said, “If I don’t make it out Jockey please come looking for me.” Edmon disappeared like a ninja. So jockey and Nico hid in the bush and they waited for Edmon but they waited for hours and hours. Jockey went looking for him but when he reached the area where they bumped into the hid out he was suppressed to find out that there was no ship so he felt around him but all he could feel was wind on top of him so he jumped and he was in the ship he looked around and there was Edmon in a cage of some sort.

Gone not here

When he got Edmon out of that stinky smelly cage they ran for the exit but as soon as they jumped out Edmon said, “they are the people that train us and you did just fine but one detail why is your stuck because they are about to take off Jockey thought about that and time traveled so he could worn his past self about this so he made it out safe and sound so they went back home without harm done. On their next adventure they were ready for action . Every month they have this training test.